Dusk, and billowing clouds sprawl
across the horizon. Bright blue contrasts with the grey of a janitor's uniform.
The line of the storm approaches. Sheets of rain slant down, a wall of water
draws nearer. As the edge of the storm tumbles through the sky over my head, I
being to think I should seek refuge inside.... whoa, hey, I'm writing in
present tense. I made a pact with myself to only ever write in past tense. It's
not my fault. It just slipped out. What would the first few sentences sound
like in past tense?
Dusk, and billowing clouds were
sprawled across the horizon. Bright blue sky contrasted with the grey of a
janitor's uniform. The line of the storm approached. Sheets of rain slanted
down, a wall of water drew nearer. As the edge of the storm tumbled through the
sky over my head, I thought perhaps I should seek refuge inside. I turned in a
slow circle, looking for shelter in my surroundings. There was no 'inside', not
exactly, but there was 'underneath'. Underneath was a downgrade from inside,
but it was decidedly better than 'in the open.' I jogged across the meadow
towards the enormous slab of granite, which poked from the ground at an angle
so as to form an overhang. The first raindrops, harbingers of an awesome storm,
pelted my increasingly viscous vicinity. Wait. Viscous vicinity? No. Vicious
vicinity. That's better. My surroundings were not made of molasses. In fact,
quite the opposite. The lighting threw all lines into sharp relief, including
the wrinkled edges of a crushed beer can. Someone had gotten drunk in this
spot. This boulder offered all sorts of refuse. I mean refuge.
"Hey!" I shouted at the
storm. "Knock it off!" The storm could hear me, I was sure, but it
paid me no mind. Perhaps I had not been specific enough. "Knock what
off?" it may have wondered. "I am doing many things. I am raining, I
am hailing. I am blowing, I am sailing. Through the sky. I'm under a lot of
pressure." This last reproach reached my mind, and I yelled, "False.
You're a low pressure system."
The storm thought about that for a moment, and then broke
down in tears at the realization of how deceived it had been. Unfortunately,
this ended our discourse, for the sound of the storm's tears pounding the
ground, the rock, all of existence, drowned out anything else I would have
liked to say.
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